Friday Fiction – Lamp Light

I found Rochelle’s Blog and the concept of Friday Fiction and I just couldn’t  help myself.  Below is my addition.

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Photo by:
Dawn Miller

Lamp Light

The belts didn’t match the hats on the mannequins that looked down on her.  She also noticed the jewelry didn’t shine.  Tarnished and chipped the baubles looked cheaper than they were. The rows of discount lamps some with shades, some going naked without them.  The glow from the their bulbs only revealed how bleak this place had become. She turned off each lamp to hide the sadness this place represented to her. As she walked out the only thing she left behind was, “I Quit” written in the dust on the jewelry case.

93 Words

As Always,

Woman on Pause

P.S.   The goal for Friday Fictioneers is to write a complete story with no more than 100 words based off of a photograph.  And it was HARD, but a lot of fun.

60 thoughts on “Friday Fiction – Lamp Light

    • I had the same problem. I was closer to 150 and nowhere near the end. As the others say it is a great exercise in trimming the excess words. Welcome from another newbie. Oh, and “WHAT WHAT”!! 😉

  1. Dear Sarah,

    I really like the direction you took with your story. As you go along you’ll be on the lookout for expendable words. I’ve found that this exercise in brevity has made a difference in my longer pieces.

    So…I want to extend a hearty welcome to Friday Fictioneers! You really did a wonderful job this first time around. It was a vivid read right down to the writing in the dust. Good job!

    shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Thanks! It was a very interesting exercise. I enjoyed it and can’t wait for the next one. I also started doing oneword.com (not my site nor am I affiliated) but very similar. And it is daily. I need to write every day! Thanks so much for stopping by and reading. 🙂

  2. Sarah I warn you FF is so addictive but well worth it. I like you’re story. The melancholy feeling and the freedom of two little words. Hope things change for her from here. very vivid.

  3. Great job, Sarah! I tried this out for the first time this week as well although fiction really is not my strong suit. I also love how the word confinement forces you possibly into a direction you had not intended. I think this is going to be an addiction!

    • Thanks, glad to know I am not the only new one!! I am all excited for the next one. I felt some anxiety when I couldn’t end it the way I wanted to originally but then having to stay within the word limit it led me to a better ending.

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